Dear Professor Blackstone,
I am writing to you to formally introduce myself. My name is
Chng Joe Hui, and I am a 1st-year undergraduate in Sustainable
Infrastructure Engineering (Land).
Previously, I was a student from Nanyang Polytechnic (NYP)
and was one of the students in the pioneering batch of Polytechnic Foundation
Programme (PFP for short). After PFP, I went on to complete my diploma in
Nanotechnology and Materials Sciences (specialising in Materials for
Sustainable Technology) in 2017.
Since I was young, I was always intrigued by the
components and mechanisms behind different objects. Thus, I chose to study
materials sciences as I wanted to have a deeper understanding of how objects
work from a smaller scale. Filled with understanding from my diploma programme,
I wanted to look for another engineering field to apply this knowledge. That is
when I found out about the news of lacking engineers in the railway industry in Singapore, and as
such decided to pursue this degree in SIT.
I believe that my communication strength is speaking with
impact. Often, I am tasked to start and end the team’s presentation. In fact, I
was complimented by my communications lecturer on how I introduced the content
of the presentation while briefly introducing my teammates that was presenting
those respective parts.
On the other hand, I believe my greatest weakness is
my tendency to speed through content when I am stressed/ nervous. I had never
been a confident person, and as such, becomes stressed easily when all
eyes are staring intently on me. Even during Friday’s tutorial class, where we had
to share content with our tutorial mates, I realised that I was speeding
through and not articulating some of the points as well as I could have done.
Through this module, I hope to have better stress management
and by extension stop the habit of rushing through content and articulate my
ideas better. I hope to develop these skills under your guidance.
Best Regards,
Chng Joe Hui
SIE2016 | Tutorial Group 6
Edited 27/10/19
Comments on others' letters:
- Angelina
- Christ
- Ray
- Zaki
- Ying Jia
Dear Joe,
ReplyDeleteThank you for this clear, coherent and complete self introduction. You've followed the model presented in class quite closely and produced a letter that addresses all the task requirements with quite a bit of detail. I appreciate the explanation of your interest in materials and then rail engineering, and I applaud the focused, open review of your strengths and weaknesses in communication.
It is also good to know that you have very specific goals for your work in the module. I'm certain we can address each of those. Of course, refining students' skills of articulation are the heart of this module.
Toward that end, for this letter, though it is very well written, you need to review the following:
1. completeness in expression
-- That is when I chanced upon the news of lacking engineers in the railway industry, and as such decided to pursue this degree in SIT. > (Who is lacking?)
2. phrasing/word use
-- one of my greatest weakness > (one of many) ?
-- Even on Friday’s tutorial class > Even during Friday’s tutorial class,
3. verb use (+ sentence structure)
-- I had never been much of a confident person, and as such becomes stressed easily when all eyes are staring intently on me. > I have never been a confident person, and as such, I become stressed easily when all eyes are staring intently on me.
I look forward to working with you further this term.
Best wishes,
Brad
Hi Prof,
DeleteThanks for the feedback on my writing. I will edit when there are more inputs from my tutorial mates.
Hi Joe, I think you did a good job as you included specific examples of your points , and your letter was coherent and meaningful.
ReplyDeleteHi Christ,
DeleteThanks for the feedback!